Could someone review the start of my story?

You use lots of superlatives, but don't provide much detail. You need to make up some real story that actually elicits the emotions, instead of just writing that the emotions should be imagined by the reader. Don't say, "the bizarre night sky", you have to actually describe a sky that the reader will think is bizarre without you saying it is bizarre. No apply the same principle to every sentence in your story, and add some kind of an actual plot, and your story will be half finished.